However, if it weren't for the greentext formatting, this could be a hell of a hallmark movie.
It's cheesy for sure, but there's a good idea buried under that. I'd go as far as to say that, with a delicate enough hand, this could be a solid to great short story or novella. But you'd have to really go easy.
This would be depressing as shit if it were true, not really a hallmark movie. I’d be traumatized if I found out a dead brother had done something like that for me and I just blew it off.
Right? Where's the resolution? You just finish the movie feeling like the main character is an even bigger piece of shit than you realized? That's... almost the exact opposite of a hallmark movie - you need everything tied up in a pretty little bow by the end
I dunno, it's sad but powerful. Maybe not actual hallmark material, you're right, but the same basic idea. As it's written, it's cheesy, overdone, like hallmark movies, which is why that popped in my head as the comparison. It's so predictable and obvious that as written, the only kind of audience that would buy in without it breaking immersion is the kind of audience that watches hallmark movies.